Tales of the dead who scour the planes,
of eldritch horrors. Our life-force it drains.
Unspeakable stories told only in whispers.
A terror in our minds that couldn't be crisper.
Howls echoing into the night.
Yet you know this couldn't be right.
Seeing things you can't comprehend.
Chilled to your soul, this could be the end.
Distortions and beings that shouldn't be there.
As quick as they came, they vanish to the air.
Unknown entities that dwell between worlds.
From the ether that spun and wirled.
Those untold horrors that wrack our mind.
Not knowing what knowledge they left behind.
lovecraft inspired
lovecraft inspired
---Wolf---
"And a godlike man--a man who is pure force--inaccessible to any compromise--is called a hero."
"And a godlike man--a man who is pure force--inaccessible to any compromise--is called a hero."
Definately cthulu-esque.
I have to agree with Sobek, it isn't the words. I like that you get the fleeting thoughts and half-formed feelings and fears across, but the words themselves seem lacking... but then, Lovecraft himself was bad for that. The 'scariest' parts were the ones where he refused to describe them, leaving it instead to the dark parts of your imagination.
I have to agree with Sobek, it isn't the words. I like that you get the fleeting thoughts and half-formed feelings and fears across, but the words themselves seem lacking... but then, Lovecraft himself was bad for that. The 'scariest' parts were the ones where he refused to describe them, leaving it instead to the dark parts of your imagination.
Sorry Wolf, I almost missed it.
This, I think, is one of the best of your dark stuff. The last line is a great closer.
More of a Poe fan, I've only read two Lovecraft stories (one was in public school and I can't even remember it) and the other was "At the Mountains of Madness." I did enjoy "Mountains'" sense of desolate isolation and the way Lovecraft exposes the hideousness, in the mind, of the strange and alien; the unknown.
The only constructive criticism I could offer would be that the line: "Chilled to your soul, this could be the end" is either a little weak/obvious, or a bit out of place. Don't get me wrong though, it's probably only my personal sense of style talking. It's been months since I've written, so I'm not sure I trust my sense at the moment.
cheers,
T. Guy.
This, I think, is one of the best of your dark stuff. The last line is a great closer.
More of a Poe fan, I've only read two Lovecraft stories (one was in public school and I can't even remember it) and the other was "At the Mountains of Madness." I did enjoy "Mountains'" sense of desolate isolation and the way Lovecraft exposes the hideousness, in the mind, of the strange and alien; the unknown.
The only constructive criticism I could offer would be that the line: "Chilled to your soul, this could be the end" is either a little weak/obvious, or a bit out of place. Don't get me wrong though, it's probably only my personal sense of style talking. It's been months since I've written, so I'm not sure I trust my sense at the moment.
cheers,
T. Guy.
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