Everything Under the Moon

I would really wanna know what you think about the song, so I would appreciated if you could give me some feedback.



Why did you left me here behind?
I've cried endless nights
and had so many fights
You are always in my mind

I'm in a dark place
Do you even care
How do you dare
Look down on me from your space

My nights are cold and lonely
I can hardly eat
Always in a heat
I'd have to get rid of you

I'm in a dark place
Do you even care
How do you dare
Look down on me from your space


I should just let you be
I want to forget
Dont want you to be disappointed
with me you see


You never told me the truth
messing up my youth
Why you never told me
I dis-agree


I'm in a dark place
Do you even care
How do you dare
Look down on me from your space




© By Meaghann

Could use some work. Good writing.

What do you mean by could use some work? Could you explain some more please?

Well you could use more imagery for one.
It seems to be an emotional song but it doesn't really convey the emotion you are trying to portray in it.

Ok thanks for the info; I'm working on it.