Why I Choose to Exist

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Suppose;
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Why I Choose to Exist

Postby Suppose; » Thu Mar 20, 2008 4:01 pm

"Why I choose to Exist"
By: Suppose; (Me)

From clay she built them.
She gave them arms and legs
And heads,
And little clay bodies.
She called them people
In every language that did
And would ever exist.

She sat them together and said
“I love you because
You are me and I am you,
And we are here to love each other.”
Then she kissed each of the
Little Clay People
And said, “live.”

And they did,
And they do.


Note:I love criticism, as long as it is constructive. :D

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Postby [WitchMomma] » Thu Mar 20, 2008 4:23 pm

Very nice, thank you for sharing. I dabble in writing, but have never posted anything to any forum just kept it for me.

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Postby Suppose; » Thu Mar 20, 2008 4:34 pm

Thanks :)

I just recently started writing again. In fact, the inspiration for this piece hit me at about 3 am this morning, while I was laying in bed.

Every-once-in-a-while, I'll feel the need to share something that I write. I feel like it helps me relate to people on another level, if that makes much sense?

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Postby [WitchMomma] » Thu Mar 20, 2008 6:12 pm

Yes, for sure. I hear what you are saying. My mind wanders mostly at night as well, it is really the only time I have to truly THINK.

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Postby thatguy » Thu Mar 20, 2008 8:53 pm

Nice rendition of creation. I'm wondering how it would come off if you
replaced she with I, and wrote it solely in the first person. Just a though that
occurred; I really liked it.

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Postby JacklynSnyder1o1 » Fri Mar 21, 2008 12:25 am

Lovely.
I love the last part.
You=Talented.
<3
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To feel like
Feeling like a teargas
Which slides like an hybrid emotion
To feel like
Feeling like a teargas
Which hurts like artificial love
-♥

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Postby Suppose; » Fri Mar 21, 2008 3:12 pm

Thanks a lot Jacklyn :)

That's an interesting thought, thatguy. I might try writing a variation of this like that and see how it turns out.

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Postby mysticfyrefly » Tue Apr 15, 2008 10:08 pm

I really like this idea thats kinda how I look at things good way to put things into prospective :)
Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul. And sings the tune without the words, and never stops at all...Emily Dickinson

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Postby Suppose; » Thu Apr 17, 2008 10:17 pm

Thanks.
That's one of the things I like best about poetry. It's a good way to relate to other people's feelings and beliefs. Reminds me of how in a one way or another, we're all connected.

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Postby watershield » Thu Apr 24, 2008 3:36 pm

Oops, thought I started a new thread
The mind is a window to the universe, but for many the window is closed
Truth is unique, it seldom has meaning for anyone other than the one who speaks it.
My opinion is my own. I am willing to share it, though you are not required to accept it.

Jared.

Postby Jared. » Fri Apr 25, 2008 6:00 am

very beautiful :)


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