The storm

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Crimson Tears

The storm

Postby Crimson Tears » Fri May 20, 2011 12:42 am

I lay motionless in this thick rain cover I think of you, wishing, wanting just you to be here. There's lightning then thunder, now the rain is lifting. Soaked I'd hope for a hand to get warm but all I get is a grumble of thunder and icy wind in the absence of your place.
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BallisticJW
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Re: The storm

Postby BallisticJW » Mon Jun 13, 2011 5:51 am

This is intense. Sounds like lyrics to a tragic love song. I like it. I wish it were a longer read.
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Re: The storm

Postby Sage50 » Wed Jun 22, 2011 9:48 am

Very intense it puts me right in the place you describe. You should continue it.
When Time is at it pivotal; all answers will be spoken; all tongues will be silent; all hearts will be joyful; all will come to past; even as it is ending it shall be beginning so let it be.
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