Intiation Poem

[[Moondaughter]]

For my initiation, I decided to write my own poem. This way it would be special and completely me. I really would like your opinions, anything you think is missing, or anything you think shouldn't be there. Thanks

The world around me in new eyes,
Looks as pure as clear blue skies,
The trees all sway with beauty and grace,
As I walk around this wonderful place.

My Eternal Mother, guide me please, with love and light,
My God, please see fit to show me my might,
May the unspeakable be done should I cause you harm,
May my words be bonded with simple charm.

Help me care for your earth as you wish,
Help the big and the small, and even the fish,
Help me follow the ways of the old,
See everything as valuable as gold.

Here I am, to serve and to be,
To become part of you and you part of me,
To be your tool and instrument of peace,
May all ignorant thoughts cease.

Tonight, I shed my old name, and cloak myself anew,
Moondaughter, me, born of the moon, through and through,
With this name, I wish to please
I wish the pain of the world would ease.

With my wand, I honor you, my Goddess and God,
Knowing now that I can never let anything be odd,
All is love, and love is all,
Whether it be the beetle or the waterfall.

Deep in meditation, my days shall be spent,
Trying to figure out what all of this meant,
Aura seeing, divination, and prayer,
Seeing magick in simple breezes of air.

My Goddess, please keep me close,
My eternal father, I beg, show me to look at everything like a rose,
I am here as a simple servant to you, and do this through my free will,
Help me do no harm and do no ill.

The trees, shrubs, and all plants alike are my sister and brother,
Along with animals, living things and any other,
The earth and surrounding will be my temple of adoration,
To find out how to better my nation.

From this day forward, my lord and lady, I follow dedicate myself to you,
Tonight, I find myself born anew,
Wiccan Rede by my law,
And see past the little flaws.

My goddess and god, help me to my best will,
And help my serve you with the best of my skill,
Eternal mother and father, please, hear my plea,
Blessed be, and so mote is be!

[Sobek]

wow, thats gorgeous. I loved the simplicity yet intricate details, imagery and symbolisms of it.